I really enjoyed the story. Poor John and Rodney, all the angst over a misunderstanding. I would almost say that Rodney deserved the sock in the mouth, but nobody deserves to be abused by his or her lover.

I took you at your word about suggestions and listed a few of the typos that I saw.


He'd spent two weeks mostly hiding, two weeks liking his wounds and he still wasn't ready for this.
I think you meant 'licking his wounds' instead of 'liking.'

Another thing I saw was “She is not a slut, as you call her,” Teyla insisted, clearly not happy to use the derogatory term. “She is a very nice woman who lovers her boyfriend very much.” It should be the verb 'loves' instead of the noun 'lovers'.

The last thing was
“Dr McKay!” Teyla shouted at him. Rodney had never seen here this angry, not at him at least. It should be 'her' instead of 'here'.

My only other suggestion is for you to do a sequel showing Rodney and John's 'leave' maybe with more angst on the rocky road of trust and love. You do it so well. Another thing you do well is portray McKay's voice. I could almost hear him speak your words. You did a great job!