Thank you, thank you, thank you, for posting part 3 so quickly. *beams at you*
Inquiring minds want to know, will there be a part 4? Please say there will. Please. Pretty please? Pretty please with sugar on top? And a cherry! :-)
Wee fixes as requested: 'as he selected the the mess' ... one 'the' too many 'he'd never knew existed' ... 'known' 'Except his brain to too fried' ... 'brain was too' 'pressing into heat of Rodney's palm' ... 'the heat' 'He wedged his leg between John's' ... 'between John's legs' 'he didn't even notice the transporter arriving' ... 'had arrived' 'with bruise hand hands' ... 'with bruisingly hard hands'??? 'taking the away the beautiful pressure' ... 'taking away' 'from his between his legs' ... 'from between' 'The only sound in is ears was' ... 'The only sounds in his ears were' 'eying him with suspicion' ... 'eyeing' is the more common spelling I've seen but 'eying' is sometimes used as well 'boxers dug into hard the bundle of nerves' ... 'dug hard into' 'Some how Rodney' ... 'Somehow' 'pressed is hand' ... 'his' 'inept scientist everyone saw rather the confident man' ... 'rather than the' 'and loose himself in fucking him' ... 'lose' 'You finished the report for MX-568,' ... needs a question mark 'his higher functions focusing important things' ... 'focusing on' 'slid his hand into his boxers' ... 'slide' 'over the wet patch that on the front of' ... don't need 'that'
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Thank you, thank you, thank you, for posting part 3 so quickly. *beams at you*
Inquiring minds want to know, will there be a part 4? Please say there will. Please. Pretty please? Pretty please with sugar on top? And a cherry! :-)
Wee fixes as requested:
'as he selected the the mess' ... one 'the' too many
'he'd never knew existed' ... 'known'
'Except his brain to too fried' ... 'brain was too'
'pressing into heat of Rodney's palm' ... 'the heat'
'He wedged his leg between John's' ... 'between John's legs'
'he didn't even notice the transporter arriving' ... 'had arrived'
'with bruise hand hands' ... 'with bruisingly hard hands'???
'taking the away the beautiful pressure' ... 'taking away'
'from his between his legs' ... 'from between'
'The only sound in is ears was' ... 'The only sounds in his ears were'
'eying him with suspicion' ... 'eyeing' is the more common spelling I've seen but 'eying' is sometimes used as well
'boxers dug into hard the bundle of nerves' ... 'dug hard into'
'Some how Rodney' ... 'Somehow'
'pressed is hand' ... 'his'
'inept scientist everyone saw rather the confident man' ... 'rather than the'
'and loose himself in fucking him' ... 'lose'
'You finished the report for MX-568,' ... needs a question mark
'his higher functions focusing important things' ... 'focusing on'
'slid his hand into his boxers' ... 'slide'
'over the wet patch that on the front of' ... don't need 'that'